Science Class
(This is the Cookie munster and the Evil Elves)
Hello everyone! I am going to talk about Tuesday, Thursday, and Friday science class. The Evil Elves were a little bit behind the Cookie Monsters, but me and Davide came at lunch and also after school, and now we (The Evil Elves) are at the same position as the Cookie Monsters, because of me and Davide’s extra work. The Evil Elves are doing an awesome job on our compound machine!!! By the way, it is as tall as Davide(sorry Davide)!! And I think everyone in our group is doing a very good job and they are working as hard as they can.
On Tuesday's class we started to talk about the blog and comments, since some people did more than they had to on their comment, and Ms.D was also said who should do the scribe post for Tuesday, Thursday, and Friday - and it was me (Ghazaleh) and David Mamic. The Evil Elves (me, Tamara, Emilija, Ben, Eric, Nathan and Davide) were still Working on the gears, but that was just for a little bit of the class and then we started to work on the compound machine, but the Cookie Monsters started to work on their compound machine from the beggining of the class, so they had more time than we did...
On Thursday's class we started to talk about: when are we going to finish our compound machine and also talking about an email that we are spoussed to do when we are going to finish our compound machine. Ms.D also talked about the comments that we were spoussed to do to 8th or 7th grade. After we finished talking about the comments and the email and when we are supossed to finish our compound machine, then we started to build our compound machine. I made some mistake that was not good for our group, but Emilija came and helped me to correct my mistake. We were also missing a person of our group which was Tamara.
On Friday's class we started to talk about the comments and because some people did more than they had to on comment, so Ms.d asked them which one of the comments they wanted her to grade. After that she reminded me and David to do our Scribe Post for Tuesday May.10th.2011. After that Ms.D talked about the blog stuff then we again started to work on our compound machine.
On Friday's class we started to talk about the comments and because some people did more than they had to on comment, so Ms.d asked them which one of the comments they wanted her to grade. After that she reminded me and David to do our Scribe Post for Tuesday May.10th.2011. After that Ms.D talked about the blog stuff then we again started to work on our compound machine.
This are all the things that we did last week science class. I hope you enjoyed while you were reading.
This are some links that you can learn more a bout the compound machine:
Sorry but the other half was spouse to be color to!!!!
ReplyDeleteHey Ghazaleh,
ReplyDeleteI think that your post is great! Next time be sure to make a few changes though. Don't use the color black because it doesn't really make the reader want to read it (it might be boring). I was a bit confused when you put Thursday's and Friday's days as one color. I was also confused when I looked at Thursday's and Friday's paragraph because it was not spaced as much as the rest, so keep in mind that you need to space it the same, unless you want your reader to be confused. Next time make sure to also put more pictures, as well as captions for the pictures. Work on grammar and punctuation, but other than that your post was great! :D
Courtney
Ghazaleh - congratulations on improving your spelling and grammar on this post; they have improved from the last one. I like the picture you have included, but unfortunately your links are done incorrectly and only two of them work properly. This is something you should have mastered by this point for blogging. The one aspect that is missing from your post is science. You have not explained what simple machines are, what a compound machine is, why we did this project, what we learned from this project - and this should have been the focus of your post! Also, this quarter you were required to include a real-life example in your post, and you have not done that. The colors look good and your labels are awesome. So some aspects have improved, but you really need to check the rubric before turning in final work. ~Ms. D.
ReplyDeleteHi Ghazaleh!
ReplyDeleteWell, I have to say that YOU are one of the people who have improved the most over the course of this year! Color is great, spelling is better, you have a bunch of links (however not to Moodle), you have great labels, captioned pictures, etc. There are still some few things that could be improved. For example, you said that you made a mistake in your group and that you got help from Emilija. I think that this is a bit too personal; if you have to include it, then make it a bit more descriptive - what did you do wrong, how, etc. Your science looks good, although you could have explained what you are moving in to now after the compound machine and what the big machine consisted of. Other than that, you have just gotten better and better!! :)